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Tuesday, June 30, 2015

Writing Mini Lesson #25- Revising a Narrative Essay- Add- Transition Words



      Writing mini lesson #24 was DARE to revise- Delete.  This post is about DARE to Revise ADD!  ADD more details and ADD transition words!  

I use this anchor chart to go over the meaning of transition words and samples.


transition words for start, like, different, continue, and end


The mentor text I use with this skill is Through Grandpa's Eyes by Patricia MacLachian.  


In the morning, the sun pushes through the curtains into my eyes.

When I open my eyes again, I can see Grandpa nodding at me.

After breakfast, I follow Grandpa's path through the dining room in the living room.

Later, Nana brings out her clay to sculpt...

While she works, Grandpa takes out a piece of wood.

As we walk back to the house, Grandpa stops suddenly.

Before Grandpa leaves, he pulls the light chain above my bed to turn out the light.

  
For upper grades, it may be important for your standards to go over phrases and clauses.


    A phrase is a group of words that may have nouns or verbs, but it does not have a subject.
  • leaving behind the cat
  • smashing into a wall
  • before the next movie
  • after the war
    A clause is a group of words in a sentence that has a subject and predicate.  Some clauses may stand alone as their own sentence!
  • since she runs to music
  • when the saints go marching in
  • because he made the last shot
  • I dislike bullies

Then it is important to go through the class story and add details as well as transition words.

      Pam and Hillary were walking along the lake and discovered a bottle that had a written message inside!  They got the message out and read it.  It was a map of a hidden treasure.  They didn’t hesitate and excitedly started to follow it.
     They knew the location of the island that was on the map so Pam and Hillary got in a paddle boat and paddled across the lake to the island.  Once on shore, Pam led the way.  She wanted the money bad.  Hillary was scared but stuck by Pam.  They followed the clues on the map.  The first clue was to find the tallest tree.  That was easy.  Then they had to find a pile of logs.  That was easy too.  Finally, they had to find an “X” marked in the sand.  This was a more difficult task.  Hillary wanted to go home, but Pam convinced her to stay.  She said, “We must find the treasure and be rich !”  They searched and searched until Hillary spotted a small “x”.  They began digging.     
     When they reached a hard object they thought it was the treasure but it was another bottle with another map.  It took them back on shore where they had to use a compass to find the direction southwest.  They walked in that direction and came across a hurt dog by a bush.  It looked like she couldn’t walk so Hillary picked her up and carried her on their search.

     It led them to an old house and into a dark cellar.  Hillary wanted to turn back, but Pam insisted that they continue.  They could hear rustling noises.  What was behind the cellar door?  They slowly started to open the door but jumped back when they heard loud squeals!  What in the worldThe dog wiggled in Hillary’s arms which somehow gave her the courage to open the door.
     A bunch of hungry little puppies were squealing for their mother!  The dog in Hillary’s hands jumped down and hobbled towards themWe put her down and They all rushed over to her.  Hillary’sheart just melted and she could see the compassion form in Pam’s eyes.  The treasure was in the corner with a note that said, “Use this fortune for what you feel is best.”  Pam and Hillary looked at each other and knew right away what to do with the money.  It was the right thing to do.

    Next, students should add notes to their notebook:  Why do I use a bus?  Well, my mind works in mysterious ways.  Transit- means across, through.  Transit is related to transportation.  A bus is transportation. Get it?  Get your writing across!  Move through your story smoothly!

students learn about transition words and write a paragraph using transition words


    Once students get a handle on how to add details and transition words, they should go back to their own story and revise with ADD.


Next writing mini lesson #26- will be DARE to Revise - Rearrange!

Like always, 
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Monday, June 29, 2015

Writing Mini Lesson #24- Revising a Narrative Essay- Delete


In lesson #23, I shared DARE as the steps to revising.  This lesson will focus on the first letter- D.  D stands for DELETE unnecessary information.  Many times students add things that aren't needed for their story.  See below for an example.  After sharing the poster (or creating your own paragraph with an added sentence or two that doesn't make sense or fit) with the students, have them go through their own rough drafts and delete things that interrupt the flow to the story or don't belong.




Next writing mini lesson #25- will be DARE to Revise- ADD

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Tuesday, June 16, 2015

Writing Mini Lesson #23- Revising a Narrative Essay


Revising a Narrative Essay-  
Students are finished with their rough drafts and what do they want to do?  Immediately write a final copy.  NOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!  I stress the importance of revising.  Be excited about writing!  Model some writing!  They will want to imitate your enthusiasm!  Mention a few of their favorite authors and explain how they NEVER I mean NEVER take a rough draft and try to publish it.  They ALWAYS revise!  Don't get confused with the steps related to mechanics like capitalization, usage, punctuation and spelling.  That will come later.  This step is making the content of writing better!  See the transformation of writing into an amazing piece of art!

It is always good to share a mentor text for revising.  A suggestion is Hooray for Diffendoofer Day by Jack Pretlutsky and Dr. Seuss.  The appendix shows how famous authors find the need to revise!  Remind them that even the best authors revise, edit, revise, edit, over and over before they even think about the publishing stage.  Roald Dahl's website is an amazing resource to share with your students.  There is an interview with him where he talks about the importance of revising.  I am in awe over this humble man. 



I call this step DARE to REVISE.  I DARE YOU!!!!!!!
It helps to read the rough draft out loud!  When students read their own papers out loud, they can HEAR where they are making errors.  I love it when a student is reading a writing piece to me out loud and says, "I didn't mean to say that!"  I reply, "This is exactly why we are revising!"  "Think like an author!"  It reinforces what I've been telling them all along!  I like to give them options. They can read it to a peer or record it on a device where they can play it back to LISTEN for places to revise.


Students will need:
* A rough draft essay
* Colored pens or pencils
* Thesaurus
* Notebook
* Glue and scissors (if using interactive notebooks)


Whether you have your students create interactive notebooks or simply take notes in a notebook, have them add the following acronym:

D- Delete unnecessary information
A- Add more important detail and transition words.
R- Rearrange text to be logical and effective. 
E-  Exchange words for clearer and stronger ones.

As you can see, I tried changing it to READ to Revise.  I have to say my kids liked DARE to revise much more!  Sooooo I changed it back for this coming year.  It has the same skills, just a more motivating way to get them to revise.  I thought having READ would give them the idea to read it out loud, but I can honestly say, I can motivate them more when I DARE them!  We all learn from our mistakes!


I hope this helps in your writing lessons!  Next up:  Writing Mini Lesson #24 is exploring the D- DELETE when revising in a Narrative Essay!


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